雖然雅思小作文分?jǐn)?shù)比重小于大作文，但是小作文的寫作相對(duì)比較容易操作。在此建議備考時(shí)間充足的烤鴨們注重提升寫作實(shí)力和寫作速度。那么完成一篇小作文應(yīng)該從何做起呢? 我們首先分析一下6分餅圖范文，總結(jié)一些得分和十分的原因，做到心中有數(shù)。

C9T3——Band 6范文

The diagrams show statistic information regarding the ages of the habitants of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and also a estimative for 2050.

We can see that in 2000 the majority of people in Yemen was between 0 and 14 years old, whith 50.1%, whereas in Italy most of the population was between 15-59 years old (61.6%), in the same year. On the other hand, just 3.6% of people in the former country was 60 years old or more in 2000, while in the latter country this figure is represented with 24.1%.

The projections for 2050 show that the number of people with 15-59 years and 60 years or more will increase in Yemen, reaching 57.3% and 5.7% respectively. In contrast, in Italy, the population with 15-59 years will decrease to 46.2%, while people with 60 years or more will grow to 42.3%.

Overall, it is possible to see that there is an upward trend on the rates of people with 60 years or more in both countries.

下面我們結(jié)合考官評(píng)語，認(rèn)真研讀這篇范文，明確得分點(diǎn)和扣分點(diǎn)，讓我們對(duì)自己的寫作水平有更明確的衡量標(biāo)準(zhǔn)。

(1) 任務(wù)完成情況：

(得分原因)The answer addresses the task, “reporting sufficient details”(信息比較全面) for the reader to be “accurately informed”(信息準(zhǔn)確)

(失分原因)even though in each chart one element is “implied”(暗示) “rather than overtly stated”(沒有明確描述). (如范文第2段中沒有明確說明2000年也門15-59歲人口的比重以及意大利0到14歲的人口比重;再比如范文第3段中沒有明確說明兩個(gè)國家2050年0到14歲的人口比重)。

(得分原因) “Clear comparisons”(清晰的信息比較) are drawn between the two countries. An overview is given(總趨勢(shì)描述),

(失分原因) although focusing on only one age group reduces its clarity. (最后一段只總結(jié)了兩個(gè)國家60歲以上的人口的變化而忽視了另外兩個(gè)年齡段的總趨勢(shì)描述)。

(2) 連接性與連貫性：

(得分原因)The information is well organised and a range of linking devices used, e.g. whereas; the latter country.

以第二段為例讓我們一起體會(huì)連接詞的使用：

We can see that in 2000 the majority of people in Yemen was between 0 and 14 years old, with 50.1%, whereas in Italy most of the population was between 15-59 years old (61.6%), in the same year. On the other hand, just 3.6% of people in the former country was 60 years old or more in 2000, while in the latter country, this figure is represented with 24.1%.

(3) 詞匯：

(得分原因)”Vocabulary is adequate”(詞匯量和詞匯應(yīng)用準(zhǔn)確度足夠) for the task and “generally accurate”(基本準(zhǔn)確),

(失分原因)though attempt to use less common words are less successful. A few errors occur in word formation e.g. statistic (statistical); estimative(estimate), but they “do not affect understanding”(有錯(cuò)誤但是不影響理解).

(4) 語法：

(得分原因)Simple and complex sentence forms are produced with few grammatical errors,

(失分原因)but the range of structures is rather restricted(句式缺乏多樣性)

綜上我們根據(jù)“得分要素”總結(jié)答題步驟如下：

step1，找出要描述的信息的特征，比如占最多，增長快，保持不變等等。找出可以用來比較的信息，比如共同點(diǎn)，相反趨勢(shì)等等。

step2，組織段落，可以按趨勢(shì)分段，按比重分段，也可按時(shí)間分段。組織語言，盡可能把相關(guān)聯(lián)的內(nèi)容寫到一起，用連接詞銜接。

step3，歸納總趨勢(shì)，找出最明顯的特征，最大變化，最有共性的信息等。

以下圖為例，烤鴨們自己來小試牛刀：

step1:首先信息選取：

(1) working 和sleeping最多，但是一個(gè)增多，一個(gè)減少

(2) 同樣減少的是going out with friends or families

(3) 相反花在relaxing at home和traveling to work的時(shí)間都有不同程度的增加。

(4) 只有other interest and sport playing的時(shí)間沒有發(fā)生變化

step2:

開頭：改寫

第一段(1)(2)

第二段But on the other hand(3)

第三段In contrast，(4)

step3: overview(結(jié)尾)

The chart shows the percentage of time working adults spent the day on different activities in a particular country in 1985 and 2008